Based on feedback and the PCCWW workshop, I’ve rewritten my first ten pages of The Story Store. You can read them here. Let me know what you think.
…or the Pacific Coast Children’s Writers’ Workshop. It’s a two half-day, one full day intensive, where we critique and get critiques on our work.
A gorgeous location on Monterey Bay, south of Santa Cruz. For some reason I am the only male writer among about 15 women.
One of the unique things about this workshop is the inclusion of five teenage and pre-teen writers, who offer articulate and very useful takes on what they like–and don’t–like about middle grade and young adult fiction. And (judging from their short writing samples), they are accomplished writers.
i am jealous.
I’m heading for Santa Cruz at the end of the month to take a three-day writing workshop, put on by the Pacific Coast Children’s Writers Workshop. It was recommended by a long-time writer friend, Sheryl Scarborough, who’s attended and been on staff. Attendees get a chance to have their work reviewed by an agent and an editor, as well as hearing peer critiques.
I’ve sent in most of The Story Store, and am reading others’ sample chapters. Looking forward to it. I’ll FB or blog or something while I’m there, time permitting. It looks like a full schedule.
I’ve added another chapter to my work-in-progress, KillGirl.
I went to a writers conference in LA and met a freelance editor, Laura Garwood. She agreed to give The Story Store a read. What follows (here and in subsequent posts) are her observations, abbreviated for length.
Thank you so much for entrusting me with The Story Store. I sincerely enjoyed reading it, and felt invested in Alex and his family. I also felt carried along in the suspense and action. I do have some suggestions for you, however, as you revise. A lot of my comments and suggestions have less to do with throwing away what’s already on the page and more to do with building some more structure and details into it.
You have done a good job of maintaining just one point of view in each section, which is important. However, I think we need to beef up Sara’s point of view, mostly in the beginning. We get a lot of Alex’s chapters, and very few of Sara’s there. We thus end up not knowing her nearly as well as Alex, her backstory could use some strengthening. She is supposed to do a lot of drugs, but we don’t particularly see her doing that or see her under the influence.
She was very good, and inspired me to begin draft #6. More to follow.
While querying agents and publishers about The Story Store, I got started on a new book, KillGirl. You can read the first chapter here. Deborah is 15 when she becomes an assassin.
I’ve written about 10K words for the book, and about 20K words of notes. Obsessive? Maybe a little…
After numerous requests — I think it was Andy who asked — I’ve decided to post the first pages of my book, The Story Store. I’ve been sending out queries and getting rejected — 41 and counting — but at the Chicago BookExpo, I met an editor for a big publishing house who requested the entire MS.
So I’m hopeful. But then I’d be in some other line of work if I weren’t an optimist.
Let me know what you think.
I was contacted by a writer for an interview. Apparently there are some Sonic The Hedgehog fan websites out there. Sonicstadium.org is where my interview will appear. I’ll keep you posted.
To mark the (upcoming) occasion, I’ve made available downloads of all my Sonic scripts, bibles and artwork. Visit http://cartoonscripts.com/blog/downloads/sonic-the-hedgehog/ to see what’s there.
I know, I promised this like, what, 4 months ago? But here it is now. How I used agent list websites and a spreadsheet to begin my search for an agent.